Creative writing tips Dialogue or no Dialogue? (2 Viewers)

[NWO]

So, basically im writing another creative writing. Things im not including in my creative include:

1) absence of the protagonist name ( just an old man in a house, descriptions of him, alienation, described the scenery outside the outside to set the atmosphere as well- really descriptive)

2) lack of dialogue

So is this a good creative writing?

 

[Absolutezero]

Neither a nameless character or a lack of dialogue necessarily make for a bad creative. What I get the feeling you are lacking is dramatic structure.

 

[NWO]

And then ill have a flash back of the man and his past.

 

[NWO]

And waht do u mean a dramatic structure?

 

[Absolutezero]

And waht do u mean a dramatic structure?

That's a bad sign...

Dramatic structure is basically the flow of action. What happens. A guy sitting in a chair thinking about his life is a bad dramatic structure. Because nothing actually happens.

Something like this:

Set-up -> Complication -> Resolution

 

[NWO]

Ok, but i thought i would talk about something that happened in the past. For example, in my story, his grandsons are supposed to visit him. But he feels alienated. Well, since its about an old man, there shouldn't be much action lol cos he cant move. And ive been told to use a simple moment in time. But the complication could have been a misunderstanding of the old man. In the end, they visit him and he feels a sense of belonging
Oh man, gonna fail creative lmao. Other ones set in the forest. This one is really descriptive, and i thought it was good....

 

[Absolutezero]

Ok, but i thought i would talk about something that happened in the past. For example, in my story, his grandsons are supposed to visit him. But he feels alienated. Well, since its about an old man, there shouldn't be much action lol cos he cant move. And ive been told to use a simple moment in time. But the complication could have been a misunderstanding of the old man. In the end, they visit him and he feels a sense of belonging
Oh man, gonna fail creative lmao. Other ones set in the forest. This one is really descriptive, and i thought it was good....

You can have dramatic tension wear he doesn't move, as long as you have a complication. Maybe his grandkids are late for some dramatic reason. Maybe he can't get up to eat. Maybe he can hear someone breaking in. There's heaps you can do that still has tension and conflict. There's a short film called O Lobinho Nunca Mente, which is about a guy who's fallen and is paralysed. He doesn't move but there's enough action to drive the story forward. That's the sort of thing you need.

Having him reminisce about the past doesn't really go anywhere. There's no reason for us to be examining this character at this time. It may as well be written about past old man if that's what is interesting about him.

 

[Spiritual Being]

You can have dramatic tension wear he doesn't move, as long as you have a complication. Maybe his grandkids are late for some dramatic reason. Maybe he can't get up to eat. Maybe he can hear someone breaking in. There's heaps you can do that still has tension and conflict. There's a short film called O Lobinho Nunca Mente, which is about a guy who's fallen and is paralysed. He doesn't move but there's enough action to drive the story forward. That's the sort of thing you need.

Having him reminisce about the past doesn't really go anywhere. There's no reason for us to be examining this character at this time. It may as well be written about past old man if that's what is interesting about him.

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[NWO]

But no offense, from the bored of studies markers, they always say that a single point or the use of a flash back is the best or something like that. Anway, in the flash back, i talked about his past, about how his grandsons were attacked by an animal in the forest and they never forgave him. So in the end, his grandsons came abit late and his flash back ended. But i started the flash back half way through my story. Is that good enuf? PLus the flash back is kinda interesting.

 

[Absolutezero]

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But no offense, from the bored of studies markers, they always say that a single point or the use of a flash back is the best or something like that. Anway, in the flash back, i talked about his past, about how his grandsons were attacked by an animal in the forest and they never forgave him. So in the end, his grandsons came abit late and his flash back ended. But i started the flash back half way through my story. Is that good enuf? PLus the flash back is kinda interesting.

Flashbacks are great. A story where the only thing that happens is the flashback is not.

So basically, you've got

Old guy in chair -> Thinks about his grandkids and how they never forgave him -> they visit him

If that's true, then that's not much of a story. How do the repercussions of the story influence the present? Why are you telling the story in the present? What is happening now that is interesting?

 

[NWO]

i just dont know how to end it lol. Should i end the story when the bell rings or after they embrace him?

 

[NWO]

Ill send a pm instead. can you read it?

 

[NWO]

And im telling the story in the present lol ( due to the stimulus lol) you have to link to it.

 

[Absolutezero]

Ok, you may not get a response until tomorrow night, but I'll see what I can do.

 

[NWO]

If ur interested and want to help me out, ill tell me u tomorrow. im finishing it as we speak XD

 

[Absolutezero]

If ur interested and want to help me out, ill tell me u tomorrow. im finishing it as we speak XD

Send it tomorrow then I'll be home in the evening.

 

[Spiritual Being]

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[Absolutezero]

I proofed 37 English tasks and all I got was this lousy rep
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[NWO]

Yeah, thats why hes a super mod. Anway how does one become a mod here?

 

[Spiritual Being]

I proofed 37 English tasks and all I got was this lousy rep
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maybe you can share some of that 'lousy' rep with me!