raniaaaaaaaaaaa, from my teacher
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Your creative:
was very good, very nicely edited and good of you to reveal edward's inclination to make sense of the world and his place in it at the end.... im not going to give you a mark without a criteria as a point of reference, but i would say this is a band 5, possibly 6, depending on whether you incorporate the stimuli offered and respond to the question (i.e. the trials to asked for a story that demonstrated consequences of belonging, most people ignored the consequence part and just did a belonging generic story).
your essay:
is a band 6.... actually, without a conclusion and incomplete, the most you could get is a band 4, so PLEASE, im telling you band 6 on the assumption that you will HAVE a conclusion in place. If not, write a good one that is on par with your essay.