Anyone willing to critique my creative writing? (1 Viewer)

[Sallywagon]

Pretty much what the title says. I'm in year twelve and currently have two creative writing pieces that I would like help with on how to improve, so would love to send them to anyone who can help!

 

[Rochele]

I would be more than happy.
I love English )

 

[Drsoccerball]

Send it to me ill see if i can help abdi_ay@outlook.com