rusty123
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i wrote about how the grandfather tells of how, when he was a young man, he participated in a marathon (discovering "his place" - cliche and a half!). i started this part by saying how the sunlight rains down on a sign or some shit, leaving it gleaming with opportunities for everyone beholding it. then, in the very last sentence, i revealed how the grandfather had been in a wheelchair all his life (wow what a twist, im sure the marker is shocked at how he overcame adversity, blah de blah), and closed with the image of the sunlight gleaming on its wheels. it's alright, i make it sound better than it was, but do y'all think this is way too cliched?