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numg

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If it starts sounding a bit risky, keep reading....their IS a twist...


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As you lie back your muscles tighten. You put him off for a while searching for an excuse, but he refuses to be swayed as he approaches you.

He asks if you're afraid and you shake your head bravely. He has had more experience, but it's the first time his finger has found the right place.

He probes deeply and you shiver; your body tenses; but he's gentle like he promised he'd be.

He looks deeply within your eyes and tells you to trust him-he's done this many times before.

His cool smile relaxes you and you open wider to give him more room for an easy entrance. You begin to plead and beg him to hurry, but he slowly takes his time, wanting to cause you as little pain as possible. As he presses closer, going deeper, you feel the tissue give way; pain surges throughout your body and you feel the slight trickle of blood as he continues. He looks at you concerned and asks you if it's too painful. Your eyes are filled with tears but you shake your head and nod for him to go on. He begins going in and out with skill but you are now too numb to feel him within you.

After a few moments, you feel something bursting within you and he pulls it out of you, you lay panting, glad to have it over. He looks at you and smiling warmly, tells you, with a chuckle; that you have been his most stubborn yet most rewarding experience.

You smile and thank your dentist. After all, it was your first time to have a tooth pulled.
 

Winston

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lol that's very good

and i just laughed because i have dirty ass mind lol

lol maybe u should really exclude this

but it's the first time his finger has found the right place.



lol omg...
 
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Originally posted by Lexicographer
Pfft Winston! I thought you'd have got this in an email way back in 1996. I know I did.

hooray my sarcasm is not detectable
:D
 

apollo

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bah you'll just look like a rip off

one of the things you get marked on is elements of flare, creativity, etc... you will not get it by making use of that. it's age old
 

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Heheheh...but it'll stand out...and if the marker has the slightest sense of humor...

..i forgot, this is english teachers we're talking bout :p
 
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It sounds risky to me. Seeing as though some here have already seen it before, there's a chance the marker might be familiar with it too.
 

dirty dave

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even if the marker havn't senn it,
1)its too short
2) theres almost no change

still, v funny
 

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