they are the things markers love though. my responses are only about 500-600 words so not very long. just packed with imagry, descriptive language and all the language techniques i can think of. thats the way. Oh and make sure you make a huge empathesis on the change of the character. like my character's realisation that the world isn't perfect when he hears BANG, CRASH BOOM!!!. it's empathesis the journey more