Someone help: I try so hard and I barely ever get in the A range for short answers (2 Viewers)

[Tryingtodowell]

I do english advanced first of all
Idk what Im doing wrong I dont understanding why its so hard for me to get in the A range for short answers. heres a example of mine below

How does text 2 challenge the responder to reflect on gaps in cultural understanding? (3 Marks)

Text 2 effectively explores the idea of the passage of time, through the recounting of the persona’s past memories, calling upon the responder to reflect on the miscommunication in cultural understanding between others. The persona firstly establishes the forthcoming of past cultural memories through the first person pronouns ‘I’ to establish a connection with the responder, before immediately disorientating them with the enjambment ‘the longest bridge and the shortest history - thats what I learnt’ to reinforce the fact that the persona has limited cultural understanding. This is further reinforced through the conceptual metaphor ‘Bridge over the River Memory’, the idea of a bridge symbolizing the path or connection to the persona’s past and present viewpoints on life, suggesting that if ‘the bridge is short now’, the persona has gaps in his cultural knowledge and understanding, therefore effectively challenging the responder to discern these gaps in knowledge in the persona.

Can someone give me feedback on what im doing wrong here (I know you cant really without reading the poem but general feedback) thats limiting me from getting an A. Is it because of not enough analysis? linking? not cohesive enough? expression issues? doesnt make sense? idkk I need to improve and I want to going into year 12 and im concerned

Thankss

 

[Solarised]

I do english advanced first of all
Idk what Im doing wrong I dont understanding why its so hard for me to get in the A range for short answers. heres a example of mine below

How does text 2 challenge the responder to reflect on gaps in cultural understanding? (3 Marks)

Text 2 effectively explores the idea of the passage of time, through the recounting of the persona’s past memories, calling upon the responder to reflect on the miscommunication in cultural understanding between others. The persona firstly establishes the forthcoming of past cultural memories through the first person pronouns ‘I’ to establish a connection with the responder, before immediately disorientating them with the enjambment ‘the longest bridge and the shortest history - thats what I learnt’ to reinforce the fact that the persona has limited cultural understanding. This is further reinforced through the conceptual metaphor ‘Bridge over the River Memory’, the idea of a bridge symbolizing the path or connection to the persona’s past and present viewpoints on life, suggesting that if ‘the bridge is short now’, the persona has gaps in his cultural knowledge and understanding, therefore effectively challenging the responder to discern these gaps in knowledge in the persona.

Can someone give me feedback on what im doing wrong here (I know you cant really without reading the poem but general feedback) thats limiting me from getting an A. Is it because of not enough analysis? linking? not cohesive enough? expression issues? doesnt make sense? idkk I need to improve and I want to going into year 12 and im concerned

Thankss

Your analysis of how Text 2 challenges the responder to reflect on gaps in cultural understanding is insightful, but there are several areas where you could enhance your response:

Your argument could benefit from clearer topic sentences and transitions. Consider starting each point with a strong topic sentence that directly relates to how the text challenges cultural understanding. While you mention enjambment and metaphor, delve deeper into how these devices specifically affect the responder's perception. For example, explain how the enjambment might create a sense of urgency or confusion, prompting the responder to reflect on the persona's fragmented understanding. When you quote the metaphor “Bridge over the River Memory,” provide a bit more context about its significance. You might explore how the metaphor not only indicates gaps but also suggests the persona's desire to bridge those gaps, fostering a deeper reflection for the responder. Consider discussing how the persona's cultural gaps might resonate with wider societal issues of understanding and connection. This would elevate your analysis and encourage the responder to think beyond the text itself. Wrap up your response with a brief conclusion that reiterates how these elements collectively challenge the responder to examine their own cultural understandings.

 

[Tryingtodowell]

Your analysis of how Text 2 challenges the responder to reflect on gaps in cultural understanding is insightful, but there are several areas where you could enhance your response:

Your argument could benefit from clearer topic sentences and transitions. Consider starting each point with a strong topic sentence that directly relates to how the text challenges cultural understanding. While you mention enjambment and metaphor, delve deeper into how these devices specifically affect the responder's perception. For example, explain how the enjambment might create a sense of urgency or confusion, prompting the responder to reflect on the persona's fragmented understanding. When you quote the metaphor “Bridge over the River Memory,” provide a bit more context about its significance. You might explore how the metaphor not only indicates gaps but also suggests the persona's desire to bridge those gaps, fostering a deeper reflection for the responder. Consider discussing how the persona's cultural gaps might resonate with wider societal issues of understanding and connection. This would elevate your analysis and encourage the responder to think beyond the text itself. Wrap up your response with a brief conclusion that reiterates how these elements collectively challenge the responder to examine their own cultural understandings.

Thank you so much!!! im prolly wrong but isnt that a little too much for a 3 marker? idk but overall thank you

 

[Solarised]

Thank you so much!!! im prolly wrong but isnt that a little too much for a 3 marker? idk but overall thank you

Yes but take all of these factors into account and make this into one short and concise paragraph. In the HSC they will be more lenient as you are on time constraints, and they will understand the pressure of the exam. But with some practice, you'll surely get A's if you put in the effort. Best of luck

 

[tigerian]

I do english advanced first of all
Idk what Im doing wrong I dont understanding why its so hard for me to get in the A range for short answers. heres a example of mine below

How does text 2 challenge the responder to reflect on gaps in cultural understanding? (3 Marks)

Text 2 effectively explores the idea of the passage of time, through the recounting of the persona’s past memories, calling upon the responder to reflect on the miscommunication in cultural understanding between others. The persona firstly establishes the forthcoming of past cultural memories through the first person pronouns ‘I’ to establish a connection with the responder, before immediately disorientating them with the enjambment ‘the longest bridge and the shortest history - thats what I learnt’ to reinforce the fact that the persona has limited cultural understanding. This is further reinforced through the conceptual metaphor ‘Bridge over the River Memory’, the idea of a bridge symbolizing the path or connection to the persona’s past and present viewpoints on life, suggesting that if ‘the bridge is short now’, the persona has gaps in his cultural knowledge and understanding, therefore effectively challenging the responder to discern these gaps in knowledge in the persona.

Can someone give me feedback on what im doing wrong here (I know you cant really without reading the poem but general feedback) thats limiting me from getting an A. Is it because of not enough analysis? linking? not cohesive enough? expression issues? doesnt make sense? idkk I need to improve and I want to going into year 12 and im concerned

Thankss

im a qualified English teacher and hsc marker . I can help you . More information on your pm

 

[idkkdi]

I do english advanced first of all
Idk what Im doing wrong I dont understanding why its so hard for me to get in the A range for short answers. heres a example of mine below

How does text 2 challenge the responder to reflect on gaps in cultural understanding? (3 Marks)

Text 2 effectively explores the idea of the passage of time, through the recounting of the persona’s past memories, calling upon the responder to reflect on the miscommunication in cultural understanding between others. The persona firstly establishes the forthcoming of past cultural memories through the first person pronouns ‘I’ to establish a connection with the responder, before immediately disorientating them with the enjambment ‘the longest bridge and the shortest history - thats what I learnt’ to reinforce the fact that the persona has limited cultural understanding. This is further reinforced through the conceptual metaphor ‘Bridge over the River Memory’, the idea of a bridge symbolizing the path or connection to the persona’s past and present viewpoints on life, suggesting that if ‘the bridge is short now’, the persona has gaps in his cultural knowledge and understanding, therefore effectively challenging the responder to discern these gaps in knowledge in the persona.

Can someone give me feedback on what im doing wrong here (I know you cant really without reading the poem but general feedback) thats limiting me from getting an A. Is it because of not enough analysis? linking? not cohesive enough? expression issues? doesnt make sense? idkk I need to improve and I want to going into year 12 and im concerned

Thankss

i think u would need to flesh out what the gaps are. being specific precise and insightful should help you reach a range

 

[tigerian]

I do english advanced first of all
Idk what Im doing wrong I dont understanding why its so hard for me to get in the A range for short answers. heres a example of mine below

How does text 2 challenge the responder to reflect on gaps in cultural understanding? (3 Marks)

Text 2 effectively explores the idea of the passage of time, through the recounting of the persona’s past memories, calling upon the responder to reflect on the miscommunication in cultural understanding between others. The persona firstly establishes the forthcoming of past cultural memories through the first person pronouns ‘I’ to establish a connection with the responder, before immediately disorientating them with the enjambment ‘the longest bridge and the shortest history - thats what I learnt’ to reinforce the fact that the persona has limited cultural understanding. This is further reinforced through the conceptual metaphor ‘Bridge over the River Memory’, the idea of a bridge symbolizing the path or connection to the persona’s past and present viewpoints on life, suggesting that if ‘the bridge is short now’, the persona has gaps in his cultural knowledge and understanding, therefore effectively challenging the responder to discern these gaps in knowledge in the persona.

Can someone give me feedback on what im doing wrong here (I know you cant really without reading the poem but general feedback) thats limiting me from getting an A. Is it because of not enough analysis? linking? not cohesive enough? expression issues? doesnt make sense? idkk I need to improve and I want to going into year 12 and im concerned

Thankss

I will have son3 feedback ready to send to you Monday morning

 

[tigerian]

I do english advanced first of all
Idk what Im doing wrong I dont understanding why its so hard for me to get in the A range for short answers. heres a example of mine below

How does text 2 challenge the responder to reflect on gaps in cultural understanding? (3 Marks)

Text 2 effectively explores the idea of the passage of time, through the recounting of the persona’s past memories, calling upon the responder to reflect on the miscommunication in cultural understanding between others. The persona firstly establishes the forthcoming of past cultural memories through the first person pronouns ‘I’ to establish a connection with the responder, before immediately disorientating them with the enjambment ‘the longest bridge and the shortest history - thats what I learnt’ to reinforce the fact that the persona has limited cultural understanding. This is further reinforced through the conceptual metaphor ‘Bridge over the River Memory’, the idea of a bridge symbolizing the path or connection to the persona’s past and present viewpoints on life, suggesting that if ‘the bridge is short now’, the persona has gaps in his cultural knowledge and understanding, therefore effectively challenging the responder to discern these gaps in knowledge in the persona.

Can someone give me feedback on what im doing wrong here (I know you cant really without reading the poem but general feedback) thats limiting me from getting an A. Is it because of not enough analysis? linking? not cohesive enough? expression issues? doesnt make sense? idkk I need to improve and I want to going into year 12 and im concerned

Thankss

I have a trial paper for adv eng paper 1 with answer key as well if that helps I can send for year 12 and yearc11

 

[igor9]

sir tigerian, thank you for your service to humanity

 

[igor9]

Thank you so much!!! im prolly wrong but isnt that a little too much for a 3 marker? idk but overall thank you

damn trawg both of you are wrong, you are both writing too much for a 3 marker, that looks more like a 4 marker, just get ur 3 marks and dip

 

[Tryingtodowell]

I have a trial paper for adv eng paper 1 with answer key as well if that helps I can send for year 12 and yearc11

Yes please tysm mr sir

 

[igor9]

Yes please tysm sir

please call him mr sir outta respect please

 

[Tryingtodowell]

please call him mr sir outta respect please

oh mb

 

[fijifrotter]

I do english advanced first of all
Idk what Im doing wrong I dont understanding why its so hard for me to get in the A range for short answers. heres a example of mine below

How does text 2 challenge the responder to reflect on gaps in cultural understanding? (3 Marks)

Text 2 effectively explores the idea of the passage of time, through the recounting of the persona’s past memories, calling upon the responder to reflect on the miscommunication in cultural understanding between others. The persona firstly establishes the forthcoming of past cultural memories through the first person pronouns ‘I’ to establish a connection with the responder, before immediately disorientating them with the enjambment ‘the longest bridge and the shortest history - thats what I learnt’ to reinforce the fact that the persona has limited cultural understanding. This is further reinforced through the conceptual metaphor ‘Bridge over the River Memory’, the idea of a bridge symbolizing the path or connection to the persona’s past and present viewpoints on life, suggesting that if ‘the bridge is short now’, the persona has gaps in his cultural knowledge and understanding, therefore effectively challenging the responder to discern these gaps in knowledge in the persona.

Can someone give me feedback on what im doing wrong here (I know you cant really without reading the poem but general feedback) thats limiting me from getting an A. Is it because of not enough analysis? linking? not cohesive enough? expression issues? doesnt make sense? idkk I need to improve and I want to going into year 12 and im concerned

Thankss

its english just dont put any effort in and do well elsewhere, stupid subject

 

[shoulfer]

I Mr Sir

 

[Solarised]

its english just dont put any effort in and do well elsewhere, stupid subject

Why, English no matter what counts towards your atar. You have to do well in English if you want a good atar.

 

[igor9]

Why, English no matter what counts towards your star. You have to do well in English if you want a good atar.

fair enough, but if their passions lie in other subjects and they're good at them and can get their desired atar, then who gives a shit. I am pretty good at english but I also dislike it too.

 

[Solarised]

fair enough, but if their passions lie in other subjects and they're good at them and can get their desired atar, then who gives a shit. I am pretty good at english but I also dislike it too.

You don't have to like it, just be good at it lol. Not even good just decent, and if he wants A's for his responses clearly he is looking to be a high achiever

 

[fijifrotter]

Why, English no matter what counts towards your atar. You have to do well in English if you want a good atar.

if your not an idiot a 70% is on the cards, band 5 and leave

 

[Solarised]

if your not an idiot a 70% is on the cards, band 5 and leave

He clearly wants higher, so it don't really matter. And a 70% can be done by anyone and prolly this person gets around this percentage. Although why not aim higher and try to maximise your atar. mid band 5s are pretty achievable for english.