start of a biology discussion (hot or not) (1 Viewer)

[Melli]

hey this is the start of my discussion for bio the assessment we did was a feild study on a local forest plz tell me if it sounds good or not thanx

After analysing the Koondrook state forest we were able to graph, tabulate, observe and record any general observations, abiotic features such as air and leaf litter temperatures and light, soil tests

 

[Melli]

plz be honest and not jus say it is good to make me feel good thanx

 

[*girl04*]

i dont do biology, but i can give you advice in terms of english.

dont start with after, you just dont!
try saying the same thing in a different order

 

[Melli]

what other words could i use?????????
i've jus had a total mental blank and i'm scared i'm not goin to get it done b4 2morrow i've been tryen to do it for weeks but it jus not coming

 

[*girl04*]

seriousloy dont stress too much! theyprobably wont care about your eng skills in biology.

Say like We were succesfully able to graph, record blah blah blah after analysing the ..

 

[Melli]

thanx now that u say that that sounds good thanx thanx thanx

 

[*girl04*]

thats okay!!!!!!!!

 

[*girl04*]

thats okay!!!!!!!!

 

[kimmeh]

is this the major report? dont use first person in reports

 

[Melli]

thanx every1 it's done now thanx for all the help

 

[Calculon]

Originally posted by kimmeh
is this the major report? dont use first person in reports

Its the same with methods, you should get into the habit of using 3rd person past tense.