ScottyG you're idea sounds great, you seem to know what you're doing and where you're going to take it.
I like the sound of the whole objective worlds apart thing. The innocent youth side kind of reminds me of that short film Birthday Boy.
(Hope I didn't give to much away, if i have let us know)
But yeah, probably not too good of an idea to give away too many details. Particulary at this early stage, and especially when you say you're journal isn't up to scratch.
Oh I wish I could.
But, alas, one must be making progress before one can monitor it
PS Had a look at that one 'The Bus' you mentioned, and I thought it was really good. Thanks for the tip.