Hey guys could you please review this intro to the page about myself:
Dear respected Sir/Madam,
I, Mihir Dahiya am currently studying in killara high school in year 11 and am extremely interested in learning about the financial sector. Earlier, my passion was in medicine and biology. However, for the past two years after taking commerce in year 10, I have realized that my talent and interest lies in this field. Through hard work and dedication I achieved a satisfactory result of 98 percent overall in year 10 commerce. My performance in mathematics, science and English was great as well. Due to my strongly developing interest in this area, I chose economics in year 11. In our first assessment task I achieved an excellent result. One day, I happened to come over a book, "The intelligent investor", and I found it very interesting. Since, I have broadened my limited knowledge of this subject by reading articles, newspapers and books. Learning about the circular flow of income, personal finance and how an economy operates was fun as well. I do not have much knowledge of careers in this field and am very eager to know about this since it may change my life. I do this subject (economics and commerce) out of happiness rather than for happiness. UBS finance academy provides an excellent opportunity for me to deepen my knowledge of this area of study including learning about careers in this field. It will be a chance for me to interact positively with my peers from other schools attending the academy, creating lifelong friendships along the journey, and to improve my leadership and communication skills. Rarely do such beautiful opportunities strike my path, and I am grateful that one has since receiving the application form.